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sahil

12/6/2016

9 Comments

 
                           Shape Shifter

“We need to get out of here,” Tom continued, “Or else he will kill us!” As we ran down the bumpy hill, instantly we saw the man in his black leather jacket looking at us. We freaked out! We ran the other way. Afterwards we lost him. My friends were so thirsty we went to the vending machine in the shop and it was broken because of the earthquake, my two friends and I grabbed a coca-cola bottle. When we finished drinking we went out again. Suddenly, my friend shouted that the man was behind us!...As I turned round it changed shape into something like a panther.


By Sahil. ​
9 Comments
Kacey
12/6/2016 09:07:20 am

Well done Sahil, great story I really liked the way you used the prompt.

Star= I loved the way you set your story

Wish=A few more adjectives

Star=Excellent sentence openers

Question=Is that the ending of the story or is there more too it.

Your story was so good I wanted to hear the rest of it.

Kind regards
Kacey

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Rhys
12/6/2016 02:35:09 pm

Great sentence openers
Use more adjectives
Good use of prompt
Why did it change shape?

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Daniel
12/7/2016 07:57:56 am

***great story maybe add more adjectives

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Emily
12/7/2016 10:21:18 am

Hi Sahil, love your story. Use more adjectives.

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Sean
12/7/2016 11:17:19 am

Hi Sahill, really nice story very interesting story to

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Catherine
12/7/2016 11:53:45 am

Hi Sahil,
Star- Great cliffhanger at the end
Star- Great sentence openers
Wish- Use a few more adjectives
Question- Who was the man?

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Bryan
12/12/2016 06:38:23 am

Hi Sahil.
Great story.
I cant even imagine an earthquake.
Every week I like to visit your page to see what suprises you have this week.
By Bryan

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MMAFright
12/12/2016 09:06:22 am

Dear Sahil
Wow, that is awesome. I love the part that she grabbed a coke bottle.That is very scary.
Keep blogging.

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Nicolas
12/15/2016 04:11:58 pm

***Great use of speach marks***
***Really like the plot***
Wish : You really should have added more commas.
I wonder what happens next.
Well done

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